Inverted Pyramid Exercise

Page 181, exercise 1 of Rich:
Summary Lead
Backup (quotes and facts)
Supporting Points
Ending

Potential connections with cancer led to a ban on the use of hand-held radar guns by Connecticut State Police, yesterday, in Meriden, Conn.

The ban was ordered as a precaution following concerns that troopers could develop cancer from long-term exposure to radiation waves emitted by the radar guns. The ban was implemented two months after three municipal police officers in Connecticut filed workers' compensation claims relating cancer to the use of the hand-held radar guns currently under investigation.

The ban will withdraw 70 devices, while state troopers continue to utilize radar units with transmitters mounted on the outside of their cruisers.

"The feeling here is to err on the side of caution until more is known about the issue," said Adam Berluti, state police spokesman. "The whole situation is under review."


Ok, so a few things. I realize now that I didn't cite a source in the summary lede. I think it should be ok, since I am talking about the State Police department (which is a pretty official thing). Yes?
Also, I decided to start out by answering the "why" rather than the who/what/where. I think that focusing heavily on the cancer claim opens the article to a wider range of audiences, not just those directly involved with or related to Connecticut State Troopers. It might even spark other concerns about what other transmitters may/may not link with cancer down the road.
Finally, the whole article seems to be weighed down by possibilities, which I think is a safe bet. I introduce with "Potential connections" and end with the whole situation "under review" which implies that there may or may not be a problem, but if so, it is getting taken care of. There isn't a real sense of urgency, but more of concern. I don't know that this would necessarily be a lede story, but it's still very relevant.